Tuesday, February 24, 2015

One paragraph writing - Dahyun/Fiona

              As we all know fish not only eat plants but also eat other fish. Generally some like light and stay close to the top of lakes or oceans and the others like swim at the bottom of the sea in order to looking for something to eat. Fish have eyes, which can see above them and all around, but it is not like us. Especially if we want to focus on something, we can’t concentrate like fish. Therefore I had with my Uncle John who told me all about the fish he kept in terrariums. That makes me obsessed with the fish.

             In our reorganization, we added verbs and conjunctions so that change the short sentences to long sentences which have wrong order. That will be attracting your attention and we also changed boring vocabulary.

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