One paragraph writing - Dahyun/Fiona

              As we all know fish not only eat plants but also eat other fish. Generally some like light and stay close to the top of lakes or oceans and the others like swim at the bottom of the sea in order to looking for something to eat. Fish have eyes, which can see above them and all around, but it is not like us. Especially if we want to focus on something, we can’t concentrate like fish. Therefore I had with my Uncle John who told me all about the fish he kept in terrariums. That makes me obsessed with the fish.

             In our reorganization, we added verbs and conjunctions so that change the short sentences to long sentences which have wrong order. That will be attracting your attention and we also changed boring vocabulary.

Assignment- Street Style Second Draft

Develop your descriptive paragraphs into a more formal essay on street style.

Add an introduction and a conclusion paragraph. Add topic sentences and transitions to the body of your essay. 

Introduction:

• Introduce the purpose of your writing.
• Try to catch the reader's attention.
• Briefly introduce the three images you will describe and make connections between them.

Conclusion:

• Summarize your ideas.
• Leave the reader with something to think about.
• Give your overall opinion on the styles presented.

Form:

• Include your name, date, class, and assignment on the top left.
• 12 pt. font
• double space
• indent with the 'tab' button for each paragraph
• embed images in your text
• include the source of your images

Assignment: Street Style

What street styles catch your attention? How do you describe what people are wearing?

First draft due: Friday Feb. 6 - PRINTED! 

Choose three photographs of people sporting arresting, stunning, hard core, spunky, casual, sophisticated or other style clothing. If you took your own photos - great! If not, go to streetpeeper.com and choose three.

Write one paragraph for each photograph. In each paragraph you should:

• describe the clothes and style in detail
• give your opinion
• use at least three vocabulary words from the list 
• have 8-12 sentences
• include an introduction sentence with identifying information and/or main idea
• include a concluding sentence

Try to add words and expressions to make your writing more engaging. You can try:

• new adjectives
• metaphors
• emotional qualities
• personal stories
• historical references
• more complex sentence structures